Summary:
Martin in “Destroyed” addresses the issue of people doping and
using mind enhancers and what effect those have on the game and the players.
Martin believes that the pureness of sports has been lost, but that the sport’s
rules are not the primary issue at hand. The issue that people should be most
concerned about is the health of the users and what effect it has on their life
now and in the future.
Paraphrase of Paragraph Ten:
Mind enhancers such as doping and steroids are a risk to the
original point of sports. They contest the principles and standards of those
who created the sports, from the Greeks to early Olympians who had official
competitions. The drugs make the sports less humane. However the main issue is
not that of the fairness and purity of sports, it is that of the athlete
competing in them. Newscasters, fans, and commentators are disheartened at the
loss of the original concept of the games; but when will everyone care about
the loss of the health of the athletes? (Martin 582)
A Stand Out Quote:
“Athletes—those who dope, who take steroids, who
cheat—are victims of far more serious maladies than their sports.” (Martin 582)
The reason that I chose this quote is because I believe this was a
turning point in Martin’s essay as far as what the true issues of performance
enhancers are. In the essay Martin began discussing how the enhancers affected
the morale and the purity of the game. In paragraph nine, Martin alludes to the
issue that enhancers are not only effect the game but the life and safety of
the players. This was what I perceived to be Martin’s main point of the
essay.
I commented on Marissa's Blog and Jennifer's Blog.
Your explanation for the quote you chose was very good! I definitely agree that that quote was the turning point in the essay and where Martin's opinion was stated. In your summary you did a good job of capturing the main idea and major points. For your paraphrase I think you could have gone a little broader and condensed a little more of the text, but overall you did really good on it!
ReplyDeleteThanks for the feedback on my paraphrase, I am still trying to figure out what a paraphrase is supposed to look like so that helps immensely!
DeleteI forgot to add this in my first comment, but I think there is a typo in line 5 of your paraphrase. I believe you were trying to say, "...commentators are disheartened at the loss of the original concept..." You just forgot the "at the".
ReplyDeleteThank you for catching that, that is what I was trying to say! :)
DeleteHi Jennica!
ReplyDeleteYou wrote a very strong summary that was clear and concise. This was well done. The paraphrase still needs a parenthetical , or in-text, citation at the end of it, as the information comes directly from an outside source, even though it's mostly in your own words. The other thing I noted was the MLA parenthetical citation you used...you can rid of the comma between the author's last name and page number.
I, too, enjoyed reading your last analysis of the quote. Well done and interesting take, in general.
Great job on your post! The summary was very well written and gave a clear idea of what the article was about.
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